Yes, I
agree with the argument made of having more e-books available throughout
Arizona State University. With all the new technologies growing immensely in
the United States. the students here at ASU are constantly on their phones,
computers, Ipads, and Kindles. This being said, why have the students lug
around hard copy books when they can be at the touch of their fingers 24/7
instead? The argument made is very strong but there is other evidence and
points that can be made to strengthen the essay such as, direct quotes from
students, polls from the staff who support the proposal. These points and quotes
would strengthen this argument because the audience will see how the student
body, as well as the staff, feel about the idea of e-books being available. The
audience for this essay is President Crow and any other staff member involved
in the decision to make books available online. Their beliefs are ones against
the idea of electronic books and their responsibilities are to make ASU the
most innovative Universities possible. They so this by exercising, executing,
and reading about problems the students and staff present, then coming up with
solutions to those problems.
In this proposal the author does
appeal the audiences emotions by mentioning the changes e-books will make will
be “Very helpful for students in need”. Seeing as though helping and making
Arizona State University beneficial to students is the staff’s main goal this
should appeal to their emotion in that sense. The author also mentioned with
this change ASU “will be noticed” and “will be at the forefront of technology”.
Not only do the staff here at ASU need to please the students but they also
need to please incoming students and their competition (other top Universities
in the U.S.). Having that title would draw new students in and blow away the
competition. The author never really mentions his credibility though. I can
only assume that the author is a student at ASU from the contents of the
proposal. I would give the author a 5 out of 10 for his use of Ethos throughout
the proposal.
Even though the author’s use of
Ethos was not present, his use of Logos was appropriate. The writer used quotes
from credible research companies, such as ABI Research, The College Board, and
Arizona Christian University that backed up his evidence and supported the
claims. The writer can definitely add evidence from ASU itself. Using quotes,
stats, polls, and other data filled evidence from the students and staff adding
a more personal approach to this proposal. Having these statistics from
students who agree with the proposal for more online books will persuade the
audience to see the proposal from an inside view, instead of just one students
opinion.
All in all I
feel like this is a sufficient model for a proposal assignment. The author had
many credible sources to back up his points. Most importantly the essay was
well written and will make sense to the audience.